Over the last few days I have been experimenting with Haiku. I'm not sure if the experiment is working well or not. In other words, I'm not quite sure if I am grasping the straws correctly. Here are a couple of the Haiku I have scribbled:
Day the first:
Sleek, black, prowling cat;
Graymalkin - do you come?
Magical Moll-cat.
Day the second:
LCD screen.
Giggles and shrieks of delight;
computer literate.
Day the third:
1.
Glistening white weight;
curvature of lifeless bough
magical winter.
2.
The angry sun
gold and red in cloudless skies.
Beauty - a statement.
I think I like the last two. Oh, but would number 1 work better as:
Magical winter;
dormant boughs bow beneath
glistening white snow.
Oh, maybe that one! Yeah, I think that one sounds much better. Wow, blogging helps me edit. Didn't think that'd happen!
2 comments:
Very good Ally,not got as far as Haiku yet,will post up a couple of freewrites later.Dragged some surprising and uncomfortable memories up!Think that's probably a good thing though.
Like the last one"Glistening white weight" Prefer the first version,"Magical winter" seems to close the Haiku better.But never having written one...
those were great especially the 'Day the third' ones. I have not enven thought to attempt haikus yet :)
Keep em coming
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